However beaten it may be,
You can't keep it under..
My soul's not for keeps,
It just won't surrender..
You said I won't survive,
In your world I don't belong..
You thought I would crumble,
That I was just not that strong..
Every time I rose to fly,
You tried to tie me down..
In shallow waters of mediocrity,
You wanted me to drown..
You mocked my innocence,
laughed at my wide-eyed dreams..
you painted my world black,
When I was looking at violets & greens..
The innocence is now gone,
& I don't dream any longer..
But the desire to hold on,
Has only become stronger..
I know I made mistakes
Infact I still do..
But never will I let again,
Myself be led by you..
Though I'm yet to prove myself,
Am not scared of you anymore..
I know my moment will come,
The one I've been waiting for..
So no matter how many times I fumble,
On this road, I'll keep walking..
For there, right behind my door,
I can see happiness knocking..!
Me against the world.. or me against myself..
Against whom the fight is.. I wonder..
But I know I'll win at the end..
for till then, I just won't surrender..
26 comments:
hmmm...Am i supposed to read between the lines and use my Grey cells to make some inferences??
Grey cells..? Am afraid if you even have any.. ;-)
For there, right behind my door,
I can see happiness knocking..!
Way to go.. :-D
An almost straight from the heart poem.. isn't it? ;-)
Loved it completely.. :-)
Cool hai Aunty behena
loved it!!!
another glorious bicycle ride with not a hint of wobbly wheels :)
You mocked my innocence,
laughed at my wide-eyed dreams..
you painted my world black,
When I was looking at violets & greens..
my favourite lines..
way to go..looking forward to a lot more of such work from you :)
really i m nt surprised after seeing her blog but too happy tat i was right that i m and was fan of this girl......my sweetu suni......... wat 2 say tat is all awesome an nice an really i m nt havin wrds fr tat........
only 1 thing fr ur blog an u plzzzzzzzzzz keep writin bcoz few people r there who love ur quotes......take care.,........
@ Nikhil.. almost straight from the heart.. It isn't.. A theme and few sentences structured to rhyme.. :-D that was it.. Poetry is one of the most misleading forms of expression.. but after writing this one, I'm sure it's also one of the most misinterpreted.. ;) what say?
@ Umang.. umm.. I'm ready to fly!
@ Atul.. :D :D :D that was so damn sweet.. :"> Thank you.. I'll try writing more often. :D
read the whole post (which is not a small compliment)
and the meaning seemed to change with every stanza..
still,i have no clue what mood you have written this poem in.
ahaan good good
so you have started replying to your comments :P :P :D
i dunno what meaning the poem holds for you but i can somehow relate to this one......
interesting blogspace
Happy Living!
Purva
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that's just how I perceive this verse or any verse for that matter....
Seriously, you can do much better than poems...
I mean your previous post wasn't half bad... ;) :D :D :D
@ Sachin.. read a previous poem Pebbles on the sea shore. Perhaps then you would get the idea.. The only theme.. only meaning.. n the only thing that should be understood in this poem is the last stanza.. The you i refer to is at many places, the world.. which just won't let us be & at times myself.. which becomes susceptible to this conformation..
As for the mood.. I just felt like writing something, n i just did. :D
@ Umang.. I so much have. ;)
@ Purva.. Thank you, my purpose is finally solved, to show that every poem actually surrounds lives of many.
@ Punit.. Ahaan.. ;-) I'll try writing something half good next.. ;) :P :P
great man.......
all i can say after reading d poem is....may yer moment cm soon...d one u r waiting for.....for no one hv d right to bind yer soul..n no1 can....
yer feelings shown very well!!
amen!!!
pseudo.
Loved the poem!!
I guess every one fights against themselves :-)
It is our fears our hopes and yes our hesitations that keeps us tied.. i guess the only way we can be free is by being free of ourselves.. which since is not possible.. humans r damed to eternal bondage :O
meaningful lines those..
anyways, great blog.. i really like the quality of the posts..
keep writing..
and visit mine sometimes..
xiao..
Lovely one..
the content is quite good and meaningful.. quite liked ur blog.. :)
keep it up..
happy writing..:)
Encouraging words...:)
@pseudo, suar, rohit & Priya.. Thank you..
@winnie.. I actually feel indebted, for so totally being able to understand the essence of it. Otherwise, I'm hearing all sort of things to which I dn't relate to remotely.. Very rightly said.. more than against the world, the fight is against ourselves.. it's us who keep us chained. But, is attaining this freedom impossible..? I don't think so.. Coz, you know.. the eternal bondage is not of us not being free.. but.. of hope. This is one bondage we are all damed to.. Think about it. :)
n thanks for dropping by.
Suni.
u dis is ur poem u r really a good one/my fav of dis poem is
You said I won't survive,
In your world I don't belong..
You thought I would crumble,
That I was just not that strong
how nicw it's n
beautiful piece,reminds me of a nice song i heard a long time back.
'I Will Survive' by Gloria Gaynor,
look up the lyrics.
Nice on :)
splendid!
its so good because many can relate to it i guess.... i sure did!
really nice..
kudos! :)
hey that was really gud...
totally awesome!
Beautiful work. And these lines are awesome.. Keep up the good work.
Though I'm yet to prove myself,
Am not scared of you anymore..
I know my moment will come,
The one I've been waiting for..
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